Sara Angela Rodriguez
A415-002/Chambers
Student Critique/ Stockholm Syndrome
07 February 2013
Your story was awesome. I must admit it did creep me out a
little, but in a good way. The relationship that the narrator created with the
wasps that were living inside her arm was horrifying yet sweet (in a weird way).
But, to be honest I wasn’t sure who was being held captive here: the wasps or
the narrator. It seemed to me that the narrator was holding them captive, yet
she (I assume she but in reality I have no clue if it was a male or female
narrator) is the one that is slowly becoming attached to them, showing them
kindness and caring. Because of this, and the title of your piece, I’m lead to
believe that she, not the wasps, is the true captive. But, if that is the case
it needs to be made clearer. I think that the style of writing you chose for
this piece is excellent. It was a good way to chronicle the events taking place
through the days and a good way to show the progression of emotional attachment.
I really liked how you skipped making an entry for a few days. This made the
journal seem more realistic (I feel like no one really keeps track of their
everyday activities, they only report the interesting things that happen to
them, not the ordinary) though I think it would work if the time spent with the
wasps was longer and more days would pass between the entries. Overall, I enjoyed
your story. Thanks for sharing it with us.
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