Critique on "After the Interview: Thank You Letter Drafts"

Sara Angela Rodriguez

A415-002/Chambers

Student Critique/ After the Interview: Thank You Letter Drafts

22 April 2013

You’re piece, a series of Thank You letter drafts, was very creative. I really liked how the first letter was really personal and elaborated on the side-thoughts that the narrator was thinking while being interviewed. I wish that some of that personality would carry over to the other letters. The story about Stella in the first letter was really amazing and well written.  I think that your drafts would benefit from mentioning her again, or by alluding to her in a subtle manner; for example by mentioning that the decor in the office was really nice and that you especially liked the portraits of the dogs in the office. Another thing that I think would be great is that if you actually showed the editing process that led you from the first letter to the second to the third, and what I assume, final. I think that by showing the editing process or by showing comments on the letter that we can appreciate the final product better. As it stands right now, the reader will appreciate your final minimal letter because we know the story behind it, but the actual audience (Dr. Moore) will not. I think that if we see notes on the letter change or the changes themselves or if you just add in something, a word, a phrase, a sentence, that seems off by normal standards that Ms. Moore will also feel the same tension in the letter that we do.