Sara Angela
Rodriguez
A415-002/Chambers
Student Critique/
Thirteen of These Thirteen of There Thirteen of These
4/26/2013
I really enjoyed reading
your piece. The descriptions and explanations in each section were laden with
beautiful imagery and whimsical phrases. What I especially liked about your
piece was the repetition that you included in the different sections and the reemergence
of imagery within the sections. Though, I must admit that I was a little
confused when I first read your piece. I think that my main source of confusion
came from the objects being described. I wasn’t sure how this collection of
objects fit together or if it should even be considered a collection. I wish
that one stock phrase would have repeated in each section to tie them together
or that the explanation of how they came to be would have been included somewhere
in the piece. Besides that, I really liked your work. I think that by choosing
this format to present us with these objects was a good choice. This way you
can add more sections or take some away. Of course if you do that you will also
have to change the title.
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