Critique on "Grim's Menagerie"

Sara Angela Rodriguez

A415-002/Chambers

Student Critique/ Grim’s Menagerie

4/26/2013

I really loved your piece! All the allusions to literature and popular culture gave this piece a real post- modern feel. I especially loved how the piece itself was a collection of different character sketches of these, what I assume to be, circus folk. The format that you chose for the piece worked well with its content and I think that the only thing that would make it better, stylistically, is to have the first section “Danse Macabre: Slaughterhouse Rock” set off in the same way that you set off the ending so as to give it a prelude sort of feel. As for the ending, I think that even though it works well the way it is now, it would be better for it to echo the beginning, like of like a Dance Macabre continued. Right now, even though both sections work well individually I feel that by somehow making them reflect/echo each other would make them work better. On a different note, I really like the images and individuality of each character introduced. I feel that they could really be found in the circus, if not in the main event, but in the carnival sideshow. When I first read this it gave me a very dark circus, drunken Dumbo, sort of feel and I really liked that. Keep up the good work and good luck revising your piece.