Sara Angela Rodriguez
A415-002/Chambers
Student Critique/ Graffiti
31 January 2013
I really enjoyed reading your story. I like how you have
different sections of, what I assume is, graffiti on the walls and then a short
story underneath it elaborating on the title, basing itself from the title, or
just giving a story. I would have loved it if for each section you used a
different font; I think that this would have given it a more graffiti like
feeling and it would help to emphasis that each section contained a different story/was
written by a different person/contained a different concept. I really liked all your sections but my
favorite of them all would have to be the “Mad Skillz” section. I feel like
even though that didn’t really go along with the rest of your sections (which
focused more on the graffiti itself as opposed to the artist(s)) it was very
well written, entertaining, and heart-wrenching. I feel like you can relate to
the story being told. I especially like the idea that “one misunderstood soul
[can] reach out through the barriers society imposes […]” by doing something
that most would see as counter-society. Once again I enjoyed your story. I think
that most of the criticism I have deal with the structure of the piece; those I
have written on the story itself.
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