Sara Angela Rodriguez
A415-002/Chambers
Student Critique/ Whoever Claims It Hardest, Remembers It Most
Obsessively
31 January 2013
Question: if your first sentence your title, part of the
piece, or both? I assumed that it was the title because it was the first line
and the structure in which you have the first section of the piece resembles a
poem (and you know the rule for non-title poems). I think that presenting your
title like this is an excellent idea. It brings you right to the middle of the
action, which I assume is thinking. What you are thinking about is clear—at
least to me (you are remember different circumstances you’ve experience in
bathrooms, right?). What I had a problem figuring out is where you were and why
you were remembering these specific events. From you last section I kind of got
the feeling that you were in a bathroom (“The circumference of cold porcelain
brands my skin […]” I assumed was a toilet seat) but I wasn’t sure what you
were doing there (there are different reasons you can go to the restroom as I’m
sure you know). The last line of your piece especially interests me. It made me
think that this whole series of remembrances/memories is going through your
head while you’re puking from a drunken night on the town. I really liked your
piece and I can’t wait to find out the story behind the bathroom memoirs.
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