Sara Angela Rodriguez
A415-002/Chambers
Student Critique/ Résumé for a Lamp
21 January 2013
I really enjoyed your piece. I found it to be very interesting
and creative. I would never imagine that I would be hearing the story of a lamp
through its eyes. I think that the way that this was written, with little to no
emotion on the part of the lamp just a listing of facts, dates, and information,
is brilliant. The journey of this lamp is very long, hard, and sophisticated (it
sort of reminds me of the journey that was taken by the lamp in “The Brave
Little Toaster” though this lamp has the attitude of the vacuum, but I digress.)
However, I do think that I would have liked it more if this was done in a résumé
type of outline. I think that the way you are doing it now is okay, but that it
reminds me more of journal or an outline than a résumé. But then again, by
putting it into a résumé you might end up losing great lines like the ending
line “the lamp is only temporarily unbroken” which I think was the perfect way
to end this piece; it shows not only that the story does not end, but that the
story does not end well.
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