Sara Angela Rodriguez
A415-002/Chambers
Student Critique/ Here Lies Love
3/19/2013
I really enjoyed reading your story. The composition and
the style of the language used were beautiful: the poetry, the color, and the
geometry all worked together in this story to make the reader familiar with
these two characters (Katherine and the narrator). I think that it was an
excellent choice to tell your story in sections because from section to section
there is a not only a change in topic but a change in voice (in a few sections
there is a first person narrator telling the story and in the other—5, 4, and 1—
there is what seems to be a third person omniscient narrator). Your story was
amazing and I think that it was very well written, though, I did feel that at
times I wasn’t exactly sure what was happening to the characters; I felt like
they were either breaking up or that one of them was dying but I really couldn’t
tell what was going on. I feel like this was a minor issue because the story
was more about their appearances and interactions as opposed to the development
of their relationship. Once again, I really enjoyed your story. Thanks for
sharing it with us.
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